Essay Draft for Social Studies

As always with social studies, we have moved on. For our assessment, we are writing an essay about the purpose of the treaty of Waitangi and why it was desired. For now, the essay does not contain an introduction or a conclusion and only contains the main body paragraphs.

Lawless behaviour - 

State your point - 

Lawless behaviour was a larger reason as to why we needed the treaty of Waitangi.

Why it matters - 

Lawless behaviour contributed to violence, the spread of disease and prostitution. 

Evidence/facts - 

Proof of this was how when some of the British settlers - in particular, the whalers and sailors - they would cause a majority of the violence and death when they would return from trips out to sea. They would drink in bars and fight as they wished, as well as taking prostitutes as they wished. A second point again has to do with prostitutes, and how they would spread STI's, as well as dead bodies too and how they would spread disease. This shows how the lawlessness took a toll on the health of the people. The final point greatly differs, however it serves as evidence of the effect the lawlessness had on the people. The main port of New Zealand, Kororareka or Russel, after time earned the nickname 'The Hellhole of New Zealand,' because of the lawlessness.

Sum up your point - 

Each reason holds merit as evidence and facts to prove how the lawlessness of whalers and sailors contributed to the creation of the treaty over time.

Musket Wars - 

Evidence/facts - 

Twenty thousand people died in the conflict. They chose their own fate by turning on each other. Population and tribal boundaries greatly shifted between the Maori tribes.

State your point - 

These are the three greatest pieces of evidence that prove to us how the Musket Wars were a great contributional factor to the development of the treaty of Waitangi. These wars took a great toll on everyone.

Why it matters - 

This largely matters because with the treaty of Waitangi, the Musket Wars could have been prevented, or at least prevented the wars from harming as many people as it did. Out of the twenty thousand people, who could've been saved with a simple formal agreement, so that everyone could get what they wanted?

Sum up your point - 

Out of the twenty thousand people, every single life was a price of the choices of those who wanted to go to war, for more than they already had. A treaty would have stopped this, a treaty would have saved lives. The Musket Wars served as evidence as to what would've continued to happen between the arguing people without the treaty.

Maori Rights & the Missionaries

State your point - 

The missionaries desire for the rights for the Maori people helped endorse the human welfare for the Maori people.

Why it matters - 

The missionaries caring for the Maori matters as they were people of authority that could support them. Without their support, the Maori people wouldn't have had some of the knowledge and rights they do today.

Evidence/facts - 

The missionaries taught the Maori about written language and their religion. The missionaries taught the Maori about new agricultural ways some they could improve their harvest. The missionaries gave them land and houses as gifts to support them through the British taking lands and the tribal boundary shifts caused by the Musket Wars. 

Sum up your point - 

The missionaries endorsed the formal agreement of a treaty that supported the Maori peoples right to their land and trading.

Declaration of Independence - 

Question - 

How did the Declaration of Independence contribute to the treaty of Waitangi?

Answer - 

Fascinatingly, the Declaration of Independence only contributed in the right that it established a relationship with the British as an independent country from the British. This was purely for trade as well, the British helped New Zealand create a flag so they could legally trade as a registered country. 

Evidence/facts - 

This shows us the main reason for the declaration was for trade. Evidence as to why the New Zealand people desired the declaration for the ability to trade comes from how they were continously stopped by Australian ships for not flying a registered flag. The declaration was merely a starting point for the treaty as it didn't encompass everything the treaty managed to, however, it began the trading process that greatly assisted the New Zealanders trade with other countries.

Why it matters - 

The impact of all of this was important because the declaration while beginning it, did not provide the people with everything the treaty did. It was a basis for the development of the treaty.

Sum up your point - 

The treaty began with the declaration.